Comment 2 of 2, added on June 4th, 2009 at 1:13 PM.
I fail to see any difference, Shannon.
I would have left it the way it was.
Odie from Canada
Comment 1 of 2, added on November 30th, 2005 at 9:21 PM.
This is not properly indented. The poem should read as follows:
I have tried to write Paradise
Do not move
Let the wind speak
that is paradise.
Let the Gods forgive what I
Let those I love try to forgive
what I have made.
Shannon from United States