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Comment 3 of 3, added on February 13th, 2006 at 9:32 PM.
hey tom, i think you need to look more into the rhyme scheme and its
effects. there's more to it than you think. also, make sure to spell weak
correctly before criticising.
Jeff from Spain
Comment 2 of 3, added on November 23rd, 2004 at 10:05 AM.
i really enjoyed this poem at first but then at the end i got a little
creeped out
not that i dont understand the depth of it its just that im a feather and
it said the word sex so
bye
heatherfeather from Canada
Comment 1 of 3, added on August 24th, 2004 at 8:24 AM.
The rhyme scheme in this poem seems to me at first reading forced - eyes,
spies, and the comma after the second line etc seem week. However it is all
a sarcastic take on being in love with a dummy - do other readers think
that the rhyme scheme is designed to heighten the sense of the fake ness
and ridiculousness of the narrators love and longing - or is it just the
best that Don J could do?
I liked the oedipal link, and the transparency and illusion of the love
object - captured in the last line and provoking in me as reader questions
of the reality of my own memories and remembered "loves."
tom l
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hey tom, i think you need to look more into the rhyme scheme and its
effects. there's more to it than you think. also, make sure to spell weak
correctly before criticising.
Jeff from Spain