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Comment 1 of 1, added on October 10th, 2005 at 11:24 AM.
this poem, I felt, lacked just about everything it needs to be called a
poem. If the line breaks were removed, my best way to test a poem, it has
nothing that would make sound, feel, act like a poem. not to mention it
uses workds that make no sence in this situation. Look the word strop up
and the meaning makes no sence in the context. gulls have nothing to
control wheter they go or not, in fact they cannot stop themselves and
don't squauk over not being able to go. There are no rhymes, no meter, no
artistic use of words, no metephore, no illiterisms. the only reason one
might mistake this as a poem are the line breaks. and if they are removed
this would be just what this it. a complaint made by a woman with poor use
of the english language.
none of your BZ from United States
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this poem, I felt, lacked just about everything it needs to be called a
poem. If the line breaks were removed, my best way to test a poem, it has
nothing that would make sound, feel, act like a poem. not to mention it
uses workds that make no sence in this situation. Look the word strop up
and the meaning makes no sence in the context. gulls have nothing to
control wheter they go or not, in fact they cannot stop themselves and
don't squauk over not being able to go. There are no rhymes, no meter, no
artistic use of words, no metephore, no illiterisms. the only reason one
might mistake this as a poem are the line breaks. and if they are removed
this would be just what this it. a complaint made by a woman with poor use
of the english language.
none of your BZ from United States